Because so many of you (well, QOW and Ravenetta) have requested my novel to be posted on QZ, here is the first chapter. I would love some opinions (even if they are negative, as long as they are constructive). Enjoy! link
After reading the first chapter, i do feel it has some suspense to build hopefully within the next chapter.
I like the way you make a kind of 'cliff-hanger' at the end so its much more of an attraction to readers and sets a desire to read to the next chapter.
Hopefully, in the next chapter, you've described this 'parallel universe' abit more but i do like the way you haven't gone into that aspect in depth so this can create a element of arousing mystery.
I think its quite fab so far, for someone of 15!
Thanks, Flash! I appreciate you taking the time to read it and tell me what you thought and I am also pleased you like it. Will post next chapter soon. Until then, just that cliffhanger.
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Thanks, Flash! I appreciate you taking the time to read it and tell me what you thought and I am also pleased you like it. Will post next chapter soon. Until then, just that cliffhanger.
You're welcome, dear!
*hangs on cliff* Do hurry though, i don't think i can hang on much longer before i plunge onto the jagged rocks and shatter my spine! Ouch.